It seems like an eternity the day I was born...
I moved in life like destiny's favorite chess pawn...
Life went by like a flash of lightning...
When the end came it was much frightening...
There was so much to do in life I had thought...
Always kept tending life's minor fires and drought...
Never did what it takes to be the best...
Hope after I sleep my soul will be able to rest...
Really good first attempt...I think u shud continue writing...what u try and convey is very deep in thoughts..which is quintessential for a good poem...expectations are high with the next one! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the encouraging words Kartik! :D I will try to do my best!
ReplyDeleteHey sumit.didnt know u write so well...wish u luck wit further posts...kp it up.
ReplyDeleteHey thanks a lot Janetri :) will do my best!!
ReplyDeleteI don't know why I didn't comment here earlier.. Amazing first work! The second line stole my heart away.. :) Keep penning :)
ReplyDeleteAre u sure this is ur wrk!?!?
ReplyDeleteReally impressive! :)
i agree...this one is nice...come up well...try removing "it" in the first line and "i"in the second line...by the way, its seems like thought of someone on deathbed, not of someone whose will to live is strong!
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